How to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate

 A paragraph is a collection of sentences which all relate to one main idea or topic. Effective paragraphs have four main characteristics: a topic sentence, unity, coherence, and adequate development.

Adequate Development means to communicate a single idea fully, clearly, and effectively.

            The Differences between Cohesion and Coherence

Cohesion

Cohesion is a state or situation in which all the parts or ideas fit together well so that they form a united whole. Synonym : cohesiveness, coherence

Example : There was no cohesion in their performance. The lack of cohesion within the party lost them votes at election time.

Coherence

Coherence has two specific meanings/usages.

(1) The quality that something has when it makes sense or is pleasing because all the parts or steps fit together well and logically Synonym : unity Antonym : incoherence

Example : The stage sets were brilliant and they gave coherence to a piece which was bitty in the second half. The points you make are fine, but the whole essay lacks coherence.

(2) A state or situation in which all the parts or ideas fit together so well so that they form a united whole. Synonym cohesion, cohesiveness Antonym : incoherence

Example : His arrival threatened the coherence of the group. France's entry enhanced the coherence of the alliance.

Tell more about Cohesion

Cohesion

Cohesion is achieved when writers connect their organized parts with sufficiently clear and numerous signals--like the words 'finally,' 'thus,' 'however,'--to make the development of their cases intelligible and to lead the reader safely along the emerging lines of their arguments. . . .

"[W]riting must have not only coherence, an effective design, but cohesion, an explicit set of 'hooks' and 'ties' that ensure a reader's interest and comprehension. Coherence is the kind of 'holding together' that a good design will give any discourse, whether written or spoken. Cohesion is the result of giving readers the right kind of explicit help in figuring out the design. Cohesion gives readers the clues for discovering coherence."
(Wayne C. Booth and Marshall W. Gregory, The Harper & Row Rhetoric: Writing as Thinking/Thinking as Writing, 1987)

Types of Cohesion

"In linguistics, [cohesion is] the use of language forms to indicate semantic relations between elements in a discourse. Grammatical cohesion concerns such matters as reference, ellipsis, substitution, and conjunction; lexical cohesion concerns such features as synonymy, antonymy, metonymy, collocation, repetition, etc.; instantial cohesion concerns ties that are valid only for a particular text. Together, cohesion and register contribute to textuality, the sense that something is a text and not a random collection of sentences."
(Tom Michael McCarthy and Tom McArthur, "Cohesion." The Oxford Companion to the English Language. Oxford Univ. Press, 1992)

                                                                                             

The pieces story of me

Hi everybody. In this accassion I would like to explore you the pieces of my life. Well, my name is Oki Misdar. I was born on October, 21^st 1993. I born in the town which is very convenient, Metro city but my origin is Padangness. I live in 15 b Barat at Maulana street. Simply, if you ever knew Holand Bakery or Invist so behind Holand is my address home. :D

I like reading. Almost every day I read articles of islam and sometimes scientific discoveries. I love novels that the story has good qualities such as Habbiburahman El Shirazy’s books or Andrea Hirata’s books. Have you ever read one of them? I even almost memorized part of the story :D . But, of all the overall, I’m not a nerd. Book is a loyal friend who never betrayed. When I feel gloomy, I read the novel and I was like entering into a new world. Otherwise, I love travelling so much and how social life in there. I’ve been exploring a region which previously unknown alone.

That’s part of my hobby, now let me picture you how I look like. So if you meet me in another place you can recognize me :D. I have a tiny body. I have beautifull eyes with brown color, white skin and oval face. My lips is thin and my nose is not too flat :D . I’m patient, open minded and hard worker person. I preferred children and romantic person :D . I also a visionary. That’s why I have to keep what should I keep and how to facing dynamic challenges of the world :D haaaa. I’m positive thinking and like discuss something. And I like to see things in a different way.

I’m interested in opening a business like clothing stores in the future or home industry even though I love teaching. That’s the pieces of me and my life. Someone who is from the usual and want to give a works. Someone who makes the book as a closed friend and wants to mean to many people.

Identifying the paragraph with adequate cohesion

Cohesion Sentencese	Explanation
In this accassion I would like to explore you the pieces of my life. Well, my name is Oki Misdar. I was born on October, 21st 1993	This sentence have related to the next sentence because the first sentence is cohesion with the second sentence.
I like reading. Almost every day I read articles of islam and sometimes scientific discoveries	The first sentence is explaining about hobby. The second sentence is the specific about her hobby. So, the sentences are cohesion with each sentence
I love novels that the story has good qualities such as Habbiburahman El Shirazy’s books or Andrea Hirata’s books	The sentence give example about the first statement of the first sentence.
That’s part of my hobby, now let me picture you how I look like. So if you meet me in another place you can recognize me :D.	The fist sentence have the related with the next sentence
I also a visionary. That’s why I have to keep what should I keep and how to facing dynamic challenges of the world	The first sentence is the character of writer. The second sentence is explanation about character.